Asttle Narrative Writing - The Knight

Teacher Note - ‘UNASSISTED’ ASTTLE WRITING
The children write for a total of 40 minutes. Within that timeframe they have to plan their writing (a brainstorm) write, edit and re-craft their work. They are not allowed to use dictionaries or word cards. The students completed their writing on paper but have typed it out for their blogs. 

WALT write a creative narrative story!

24.11.21

Once up on a time far away lived a king,queen and there knights. one day the knights said to the king and the queen the witch has made her a army and came to attack the kingdom. the knights were so scared but then one of the knight had a plan he can rember a book that he read when he was a kid so he check everywhere in the laibery and then he find it. it was dusty and rusty and the book was called how to defeat  a witch and her army. So on day of the war the knight rember the book he read so the knight did a spell on the witch and the army and then then they never came back again and they went to another kingdom and then we never seen the witch and her army again.

Thank-you Whaea Seroya

 

My persuasive writing plan

                WALT plan our persuasive writing on a JAM board  

My Lockdown Bubble

WALT share details about our ‘Lockdown Bubble’. 

First Draft - Mahuika Show

Once upon a time there where  two sisters and there name where kahu and sissy but sissy would never help with jobs she would just let her sister do all of the work then one day the sisters went to help there Nan do her garden so kahu just went and sissy she was hiding then 

Kahu said sissy where are you. Nan said that you have to help. sissy still did not answer. then Nan came in. Kahu where is your sister said Nan I do not know said kahu. She always gets out of the jobs in a sigh she is called lazy kahu said don't call your sister lazy Nan said. Fine but she is lazy.

A few seconds later Kahu finally fined sissy. kahu said hahahaha I fined you no no no no said sissy. what is this said kahu it is a kete said sissy. they stied into there eyes and they said its mine they said together.

Kahu just got it before sissy could. no no no kahu its mine no i got it first. then they open the magic kete. poof came out a grrrrr it grid at them. then there Nan came then she said GIRLS WHAT ARE YOU DOING in a loud voice. kahu did it what no sissy did it what no she is lieing girls stop said nan. 

ooooo and nan i fined this okay i will come over here. then suddenly nan she was turned into COAL. then this guy and his name was potiki uhhhh Kahu who is this guy I do not know. i am the last flaming figer nalie uhhhhh said sissy. wait can you help us please our nan she was turned into stone okay. then here came pukeko. he said Potiki i am going to take you on a trip heheh so potiki he hoped on his back and flew away  then sissy meet piwakawaka and he had big eyes and he was stuck in the mud so sissy help and piwakawaka said don't pull 

Middle 

then sissy meet piwakawaka and he had big eyes and he was stuck in the mud  and piwakawaka said don't pull to hard or my eye balls might fall out ahhh said sissy. Sissy helped piwakawaka get out of the mud than went back to Kahu they meet Te Ra and then Te Ra what am i? Kahu was going to say it but then Te Ra made Kahu quiet. it was all up to sissy and then she said are you a horse hahahah said Te Ra then sissy said are you a road no sissy it was your last one oo i think i know are you the sun yes so Te Ra let them pass

Then they saw Mahuika then pukeko said to Mahuika plasce un curse the burning curse then Mahuika let the curse off. 

Next steps

• Re-read each sentence - does it look right? does it make sense?
• Full stops and capital letters
• Correct your spelling errors

My Mum

I'd like to introduce you to the BEST MUM EVER.

My mum has short curly hair,shiny light browns eyes, wears ripped jeans with a flower dress or t shirt. She would sometimes let me and my brother go to the lolly shop after school but only on a Fridays. 

Mum would not let there be a hole in the back yard because then the dogs would find it and then escape.

Me and Mum like to bake, play, have hugs, watch movies together and feed the dogs.she the best mum because when I am sad she hugs me and kisses me. 

 

I love my Mum!

Love From Casey

ANZAC Day

Why we have ANZAC Day? 

We have ANZAC Day so we can honour the soldiers that had risked their lives to save millions of people and their countries. We should appreciate what they had done. ANZAC Day is on the 25th of April because that was when they landed Gallipoli in Turkey. When it is ANZAC Day we can make ANZAC cookies,go to the parade,go to the war me morials,sing the national anthem. Lest we forget

My Pets

13.04.2021 

My dogs are called Chief,Charlie and Zoe. My first dog that I had was Chief. His real name is Chief but I called him chiefly with a y. And here are some facts about him he is the oldest dog that I  had. Chief is a really sensible dog because when we say wait he waits when we say sit he sits. So he is my   favourite dog. 

The second  one that I had was Charlie she is about to turn a year old and when we brought her she was the smallest dog in her family and she is so tiny that she can fit underneath both of my gates the gate that lids into the driveway and then my second one that is close to my front door and I forgot to tell you Chief was the biggest dog in his family. Now my third one is Zoe and she was like in the middle of her family and she is one year and 8 month old and here's a facet  about her she always gets excited about nothing and the one game that all of the dogs like to play is tag and racing. Chief he always loses because he is getting old now. those were all of my pets but not all of them because I have chickens and I used to have 11 but now I have 9 because my dogs ate 2 and that was very sad we used to get 10 but now we get 8 and I almost forgotten that one of the chicken do not lane eggs so now we just get 8. But 8 is still a big number. One more thing my brother he wants to name one of the chickens don because his name is Donnie and that is short for Donnie. 

Tsunami Evacuation

We wrote a recount about our evacuation experience. WALT add details to our writing and edit carefully.

8.03.2021

One week ago on Friday there was a Tsunami Evacuation. It happened when we were on our free writing Friday. When Whaea Deb came into the class and she told us about the Tsunami  Evacuation. So everyone in the school  packed their bags  and we travelled onto a hill and some people even were crying but I was not. When we got on the hill we started eating lunch and I had a big drink of water and the water was so nice and cold that was just what I needed. A few minutes later I saw my mum and she came to pick me up and Carly aunty picked her up  but we couldn't leave until the road was safe to go on.

The Great Reading Adventure

We are learning to write a moment in time about our class assembly, 'The Great Reading Adventure'.

Finally the day has arrived it was our assembly with Te Tinana. I had butterflies  in my stomach. I was outside the door waiting for the song to play. When the song was on we came in the room and we did our actions I forgot a little bit of the actions but it was fine. Soon the Maui and the sun song came on and it was show time. I was the first one to say my lines. But when I did my lines I was fine and I do not know why I was so scared. After when Duffy said you should read for 15 minutes each night to become a reading superstar we stood up and we do our song. I loved our show and I can not wait for next year.

Tractor Trek

We wrote a recount about our Tractor Trek experience.

One week ago on Friday there were trackers at our school and my Favorited  tracker was this big lime green one and then my second one was this army car. After a while we meet this nice girl and her name was Cat. She told us about herself when she was a little girl. So she said that she lived  on a farm and she had a good life when she was a little girl. Every day her dad would pick her up on his motorbike and she would go on it and sprint time with her dad and they would go and feed their animals. But  there was one thing that she had that she was scared of  bulls and she thought that the bulls would eat her but she also thought  why would the bulls eat her but she was still scared of the bulls!!! But then they moved to inclined. She was sad because they were moving to  Auckland  and her sister and brothers were mean to her because they would not let her play with them. She was sad and she was more sadder because she was moving . After they moved she started school and she was so excited because she could make new friends at her new school but unfortunately no one wanted to play with her so for hours she had no one to play with. She was very sad and  her feelings got bigger and bigger. It started at a small feeling to a medium feeling to a huge feeling. She was sad all day all day long.

All About Me Poem

 I am learning to add details to my BIO poem writing. i wrote a poem about myself and my whanau on google drawing and i put photons on the poem

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